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NOWTIMES PEOPLE BECOMING MORE ANTISOCIAL AND LACK OF SELF RESCT.

#nowtimes #people #lack #self #resct
Not only fashion trends, but moral values are
also
 dramatically evaluating throughout the
time
. Nowadays, people tend to impudence and disrupte
to each
make a break in
disrupt
other more as compared to the past.
This
 essay will scrutinize the grounds of people oddly changing behaviour,
moreover
 the strategies how
this
 problem can be untangle.
Firstly
, the prefernce
of meter
a strong liking
preference
preferences
iali
stic things o
marked by materialism
materialistic
ver moral values originates the antisocial behaviour. In the past, people solicitude less about money and status as compared to the present,
therefore
 they have
time
 to devote to family and friends
instead
 of hypnotized by work all the
time
.
For example
, according to the survey conducted by a NGO rec
e
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an
ntly. working h
ours fo
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Working
r an adults wa
s 40 h
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adult
ours per weak whic
h is now i
Accept comma addition
week, which
week which
ncreased upto 60 h
ours
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up to
. Nowadays, beacuse t
hey are
for the reason that; on account of
because
 in self comparisi
on and comp
the act of examining resemblances
comparison
eteti
on with oth
a business relation in which two parties compete to gain customers
competition
competitions
er, th
ey ar
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
e being disrespectful to each other.
Moreover
, the invention of electronic gadgets facinates
the atte
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fascinates
fascinate
ntion and
time
 of everyones
which en
all people
everyone
kindle people to be distant from each other. Nowadays, people prefered
to live
more desirable than another
preferred
prepared
on screen not in reality wchich ca
used t
interrogative pronoun, used both substantively and adjectivally, and in direct and indirect questions, to ask for, or refer to, an individual person or thing among several of a class
which
hem tp be mor
e
in the direction of
to
engrossed in thier own
life
of them or themselves
their
there
instead
 of society.
However
, the only modus operandi of revamping the people's impudent comportment is to educate them about imporatnc
e of menta
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the importance
importance
l health in thier wel
lbein
of them or themselves
their
g
.
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well being
Moreover
, more events should be organized at national
and international level to promo
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the national and international level
a national and international level
te collaboration and harmony.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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