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Some people think that we should invent a new language for international communication. Do the benefits of this outweigh the problems?

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Despite the fact that
language
 is the most inevitable medium of communication, many would protest against the idea of having a singular
language
 around the world. I differ with
such
 a protest and agree to a large extent that
such
 a
language
 may be
beneficial
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more beneficial
 rather than
beign
the state or fact of existing
being
been
 an impediment. The biggest advantage would be smoothing of communication amongst the people.
Infact
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In fact
,
such
 linguistic experiments have been
done
produced by a manufacturing process
made
 by some countries who are multilingual. A good example of
this
 is India and China, where Hindi is the national
language
for
Suggestion
of
in
from
 the former and Mandrain
chinese
a native or inhabitant of Communist China or of Nationalist China
Chinese
 has been officially rated by the
latte
the second of two or the second mentioned of two
latter
. There are several other gains too.
For instance
, single
language
 would make the process of documentation
easy
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easier
, there shall be no need of translators, it can serve as a common
language
 between man and machine and
finally
 it has proved by
reseach
systematic investigation to establish facts
research
researcher
researches
 and survey that people who speak
same
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the same language
language
 think quite
similar
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similarly
.
This
 can diminish culture biases.
However
, it must not be taken for granted that
this
 idea may be instantly successful. In my
opinion there
Accept comma addition
opinion, there
 is a risk of native
language
 and the innumerable dialects may become extinct.
Morever
in addition
Moreover
, it may either be
rejects
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rejected
rejecting
 or may not be well adapted by the elderly population, extremely religious and orthodox culture or illiterate people.
Thus
, in the light of
above discussion it
Suggestion
the above discussion, it
the above discussion it
 can be
analyzed
examined carefully and methodically; broken down for consideration of constituent parts
analysed
 that
although
 there are few dangers in creating and implementing a new
langauage
a systematic means of communicating by the use of sounds or conventional symbols
language
languages
, my argument
prove
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proves
 that it shall be more beneficial if methodically introduced.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • International communication
  • Cultural unity
  • Trade and business facilitation
  • Language barriers
  • Global education systems
  • International diplomacy
  • Political negotiations
  • Linguistic and cultural identities
  • Resistance
  • Native languages
  • Implementation challenges
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