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The graph illustrates the changes in the birth and death rates in New Zealand since 1901 until 2101. Units are shown in thousands. Overall, the birth rates were fluctuated and it was considerably lower than present day. Death rates were
also
 dramatically lower at the beginning of the
period
. In 1901, birth rates were 20
thousand
, which is the lowest point between 1901 and 2101. Meanwhile, it increased to
peak
Suggestion
a peak
 of 66
thousand
 in around 1961. After that, it fluctuated between around 50
thousand
 and around 6
thousand
.
Subsequently
, it gradually declined to around 45
thousand
 at the end of the
period
. At the beginning of the
period
, death rates were approximately 10
thousand
 and
then
 it fluctuated and
also
rised
any of many shrubs of the genus Rosa that bear roses
rose
raised
risen
 between 1901 and around 2061.
Furthermore
, death rates reached its peak at around 2061. In the final stages, it started to fall after around 2081. At the end of the
period
 it was about 55
thousand
.
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