Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different culture and ages together Do you agree or disagree.?

Playing
Music
or listening
music
is one of the pleasant leisure activity for
somany
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so many
people
,
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,
it will mesmerize
evryone
all people
everyone
. A good
music
will grab
everyone
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everyone's
attention irrespective
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attention, irrespective
of their culture and their languages
.
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.
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
strongly agree with
this
point
,
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,
personally
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
am a great
westren
relating to or characteristic of the western parts of the world or the West as opposed to the eastern or oriental parts
western
Western
music
lover
.
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.
In
this
technology era everyone is
useing
an act that exploits or victimizes someone (treats them unfairly)
using
elctronic
of or relating to electronics; concerned with or using devices that operate on principles governing the behavior of electrons
electronic
electronics
gadgets to engage
themselvs
reflexive form of "them"
themselves
in their free time
.
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.
music
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Music
will connect
diffrent
unlike in nature or quality or form or degree
different
people
through out
all the way through
throughout
the world
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with
internet.
music
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Music
produces vibrations in every human body.
while
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While
listening individual forget their work place stress.
many
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Many
parents encourage their
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
to learn one of the
musicical
characterized by or capable of producing music
musical
instrument
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instruments
in the schools
.
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.
for
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For
istance
an occurrence of something
instance
,
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,
recently in
toronto
the provincial capital and largest city in Ontario (and the largest city in Canada)
Toronto
film festival a rock
musical
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music
concert happened
,
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,
its
mindblowing
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mind blowing
musical night for
evryone
all people
everyone
. Almost all country people gathered and enjoy the entire night with
diffrent
unlike in nature or quality or form or degree
different
kinds of
music
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
met
somany
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so many
music
lovers on that day
.
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.
on
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On
the other side some people
likes
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like
specific kind
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a specific kind
of
music
based on their
teste
the sensation that results when taste buds in the tongue and throat convey information about the chemical composition of a soluble stimulus
taste
tastes
,
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,
but still they enjoyed others
comapany
an institution created to conduct business
company
companies
in
such
live band
concerst
a performance of music by players or singers not involving theatrical staging
concerts
. In some
coutries
a politically organized body of people under a single government
countries
like
india
a republic in the Asian subcontinent in southern Asia; second most populous country in the world; achieved independence from the United Kingdom in 1947
India
,
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,
marriges
the state of being a married couple voluntarily joined for life (or until divorce)
marriage
ceramonies
a formal event performed on a special occasion
ceremonies
are celebrated with live band
music
, irrespective of ages and culture all the relatives attend the party and enjoy the event with dances just like a
kids
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kid
.
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.
which
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Which
is possible just because of energy which creates by wonderful
music
. To recaptulate, Good
music
makes happy for all kinds people ,

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural diversity
  • harmony
  • integration
  • bridging gaps
  • foster
  • ignite
  • embrace
  • communicate
  • celebrate
  • appreciate
  • inclusivity
  • universal language
  • emotional resonance
  • shared experiences
  • intercultural dialogue
  • intergenerational connections
  • cultural exchange
  • catalyst
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