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Governments should spend more money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The government is focusing on providing connectivity to many of the unconnected remote areas within and outside the boundaries to facilitate easy transportation. Some state that the government should invest more in developing railways rather than the roads. In my opinion, I agree that the investment on railways should be increased considering the guaranteed benefits it will reap for the public.
Firstly
, railways help in mass mobility of public from place to place at the same travel time, but at a lower expense in comparison to other modes of transportation.
In other words
, hundreds of people can travel towards a particular destination at a minimal charge as the overall expenditure born by the department is divided among the many passengers
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 thereby reducing the cost vested
on
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in
with
 each. Thereby making it affordable for the middle and lower class families of the society.
For example
, Bangalore to Tumkur train takes one hour to reach with a cost as less as thirty-five rupees per head for
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 seventy-two
kilometers
a metric unit of length equal to 1000 meters (or 0.621371 miles)
kilometres
. So a family of four can carefreely travel to Tumkur in one-forty rupees without much tension of traffic and accidents.
Therefore
 railways should be prioritized above roads.  
Secondly
, the development of railways will help in providing employment opportunities to many youngsters and the unemployed at different
caders
a person who designs and writes and tests computer programs
coders
cadres
codes
. Along with facilitating transportation, railways can create jobs in its department for both the educated and uneducated by considering them into roles of railway master, ticket collector, track in charge and many more.
For instance
, an educated lad with a degree can be made the account's in charge while a considerable capable person can be made the station in-charge for looking to its overall
maintainence
activity involved in maintaining something in good working order
maintenance
.
Therefore
 railways showcase more chances for the public than any. In conclusion, I agree with
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manifolded
 the amount of revenue distribution on
railways
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the railways
 than on
roads
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the roads
 taking into aspects
such
 as the movement of a large number of people between places and the creation of jobs for the need.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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  • Economic growth
  • Regional development
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  • Feasibility
  • Flexibility
  • Rural areas
  • Integration
  • Sustainable
  • Efficiency
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  • Commuters
  • Public expenditure
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