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Some people thinkthateveryoneshouldbevagetarian ,becausewe do not need to eat meat to have healthy diet,to what extend do you agree or disagree

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Vegetarian has become a controversial issue discussed everywhere around the world over a few years. More and more people have strongly believed that they can have a fine diet without eating
meat
.
In contrast
, I have a completely different belief that
meat
 consumption brings various positive sides to my life, including a wide range of vitamins and longer preservation, which will be discussed in
this
 essay. Supporters of vegetarian always claim that nutrition from consuming
vegetable
 is enough for living their lives.
However
,
this
 is not certainly true because there are a few necessary benefits of
meat
. In the
first
 place, there
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are a
 number of vitamins that we cannot obtain from vegetables.
For example
, Iodine and Omega-3 can be taken only from seafood
such
 as Tuna and Salmon, so these vitamins play an important
role in decreasing a
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a role in decreasing
 risk of poor health and strengthening many parts
in
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of
human’s body
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the human’s body
.
Next
,
meat
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the meat
 is always one of the great choices to get a high-quality protein along with several vitamins as well as greater energy.
Moreover
,
meat
 can be
also
 kept longer than
vegetable
,
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,
 which is more suitable in some situation
.
Accept space
.
For instance
, In navy, they always have a mission at sea and sometimes their mission is
prolongable
.
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.
 From
this
 situation,
meat
 not only provides more
energy but
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energy, but
 it can
also
 be maintained longer than vegetables. From what has been discussed above, I extremely disagree that the
vegetable
 has enough nutrient for human life, and there are several significant benefits arising from
meat
, including vitamins and high quality of proteins, which cannot be replaced by
vegetable
.
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.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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