scientists and technology experts seem to be more valued by modern society than musicians and artists? to what extent do you agree?

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Of course
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
agree. I agree, not because
i
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I
have background studied physics but
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I
think
that
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that's
how markets work in our society.
Ordinarly
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in our society, we always demand something
more new
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newer
and high demand provides more job.
Furthermore
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cosequently
(sentence connectors) because of the reason given
consequently
from more job lead to inferred more prosper to people undertook the jobs.
On the other hand
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, musicians and artist would have constant demand.
However
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, top one percent artist and musicians who could
infulence
a power to affect persons or events especially power based on prestige etc
influence
the markets would have more prosper than
avarage scientist
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the average scientist
average scientist
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In
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At
the end of the day,
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is not about dichotomy yes or not, but more complex about how
demans
an evil supernatural being
demons
demand
from the society works

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • valued
  • modern society
  • scientists
  • technology experts
  • musicians
  • artists
  • reliance
  • scientific advancements
  • practical benefits
  • driving economic growth
  • daily lives
  • culture
  • human emotions
  • express ideas
  • provoke thought
  • spiritual well-being
  • emotional well-being
  • preserving cultural heritage
  • subjective nature
  • diversity
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