the prevention of health problems and illness is more important than treatment and medicine. government funding should reflect this. to what extent do you agree?

The issue of the increasing number of patients with serious
disease
has been heatedly debated by public for years.
Somepeople
Suggestion
Some people
think that
government
support should be contributed to
diminsh
decrease in size, extent, or range
diminish
this
issue;
however other
Accept comma addition
however, another
however another
group of people
hold
Suggestion
holds
the opinion that the
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
will not be responsible. In the following
pparagraphs
one of several distinct subdivisions of a text intended to separate ideas; the beginning is usually marked by a new indented line
paragraphs
paragraph
, I will proffer rationale for my
veiwpoint
a mental position from which things are viewed
viewpoint
and give supporting reasons
for
Suggestion
in
this
matter. The primary reason for
gvernment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
funding is to build range of
health
care
services for all patients.
Morespesificaly
, the main goal of the
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
must be targeting patients with chronic
disease
. In
additon
a component that is added to something to improve it
addition
, give these patients
the high
Suggestion
the highest
quality
serviecs
performance of duties or provision of space and equipment helpful to others
services
service
by building a
near by
close at hand
nearby
health
care
facilities
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facility
for chronic
disease
patients. For
instunce
an occurrence of something
instance
instances
instanced
, there
shold
expresses an emotional, practical, or other reason for doing something
should
be a
centre
for renal failure patients in every constrict of a city. By doing
this
, any patients with
reanl
of or relating to the kidneys
renal
disease
could go to the
near by
close at hand
nearby
centre
and get immediate help
in stead
in place of, or as an alternative to
instead
of going to the fur away
hspitals
a health facility where patients receive treatment
hospitals
hospital
and waiting for
long time
Suggestion
a long time
. Not only the
finantial
involving financial matters
financial
support of the
government
will help to construct
near by
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a nearby health centre
nearby health centre
the nearby health centre
health
centre
, but
also
it will provide a treatment for the
serius
concerned with work or important matters rather than play or trivialities
serious
series
sick people.
Moreover
, the fund of the
government
will provide the medicine to treat life
threating
threatening or foreshadowing evil or tragic developments
threatening
disease
. For
exaple
an item of information that is typical of a class or group
example
, the money supported by the
governemt
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
would help to supply drugs for low immune patients
such
as HIV. In return,
this
would help to decrease the number of HIV patients as well as the patients would get the
tratment
care provided to improve a situation (especially medical procedures or applications that are intended to relieve illness or injury)
treatment
for free. In sum, I
senserly
with sincerity; without pretense
sincerely
maintain the
beleive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
that the
government
must give a
finincial
involving financial matters
financial
spport
give moral or psychological support, aid, or courage to
support
spot
sport
to build
health
care
facilities as well as providing medicine for serious
disease
patients in every city. I hope in the near future, the
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
support will decrease the chronic
disease
patients by building high quality
health
care
centre
and providing the effective treatment for them as soon as possible.
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