more and more prisons are being built to house the world's criminals and many people believe long-term imprisonment is the answer to solving the crime problem.However phychological assistance is what is required.

#prisons #house #world #criminals #people #imprisonment #crime #assistance

Nowadays committing a

crime

rank is increasing significantly day by day.Some believe that expanding imprisonment field is a

best

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better

way to solve these problems while others claim medical and mental

hepl

give help or assistance; be of service

help

play

essential role

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an essential role

essential roles

. Keeping convicts in prison for a long time is not a key to all predicaments.It is true that by imprisoning law breakers government can manage to prevent citizens from any harm.

However after

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However, after

releasing them we

can not

cannot

say with a great belief they do not do any unlawful acts.Even we can observe

reoccurance

happening again (especially at regular intervals)

recurrence

crime

rate will be

more higher

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higher

compared to

past

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the past

.To take

ane

indefinite article, "an" is use before a vowel sound, "a" otherwise

one

example an American criminal who

comitted

bound or obligated, as under a pledge to a particular cause, action, or attitude

committed

several crimes was released after sitting for 20 years.Yet in a day when he got a freedom a

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bigger

crime

was

comitted

bound or obligated, as under a pledge to a particular cause, action, or attitude

committed

by him again.

Law breakers

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Lawbreakers

also

have a

rights

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right

to be given a

second

chance if their

crime

does not

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relate

felony

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a felony

This

chance gives them the opportunity to show their remorse and positive sides.

Instead

of just pouring all money for constructing additional buildings it would be better they comprehend

psychological assesment

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the psychological assessment

psychological assessment

psychological assessments

can be more beneficial rather than only holding them under pressure.If government provides

such

kind of facilities like training courses law offenders soon will be able to understand how to overcome bad habits.80% of people who addicted committing wrong doings would have a lot of problems in living conditions and they are depressed

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can not

cannot

be cured by simply imprisoning them.

Instead

of putting them all blame we should think carefully another

points

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point

like that.Moral and mental support are the best therapy. To sum up,

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do not mean by that criminals should not be imprisoned,

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just want to

clarify we

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clarify, we

can achieve to lessen

violation rate

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the violation rate

by encouraging them.

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Accurate linking words

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

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Relevant & specific examples

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