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People think watching movies is a waste of time. do you agree or disagree?

#people #movies #waste #time
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Movies are considered to be one of the most important
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 in the modern era. Though, Watching movie is argue to be wasting time by people;
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, I oppose
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 view because of the primary
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 and knowledge we can get from the movies. To start with,
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, In modern society, People works around the clock and because of
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 they get very limited
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 and movies considered to be one the primary
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. So, people love to watch movie, according to their choices and preferences like comedy, action and science friction. To illustrate with an example, according to a survey from S.
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, 70% people agree to watch movies
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, Needless to say, People get knowledge about their history and culture from movies as well. In recent times, The scope of movies has been changed and industries tries to create movies who show the history and culture of a country. The good thing is people know do not have or have little knowledge about their great history, loves to watch these kind of movies as well.
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 week a movie has been released in India with the name "Tanaji: an unsung warrior", which shows about an Indian worrier who win a fort back from the
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 with his bravery and I never heard about
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 soldier in past. So it is good for people like me. In conclusion, Movies are one of the biggest sources of information, People watches movies according to their choices. Above essay shows that movies can be watched for
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 and knowing ancient cultures rather than a waste of time.
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