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Several languages are in danger of extinction because they are spoken by very small numbers of people. Some people say that governments should spend public money on saving these languages, while others believe that would be a waste of money.

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It is true that some languages are currently on the verge of extinction. One school of thought suggests that governments should allocate some budget to preserve these languages,
while others and I
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while I and others
 believe that
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 attempts are a waste of money. There are several reasons why some endangered languages are considered not worth saving.
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, the cost of saving a
language
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 will certainly cost a large amount of money and a few people particularly can get benefit from it. And it can lead to
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the growth
 of financial burden on its nation.
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, if governments allocate more funds to other important matters
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 as education, public transport and health. They can certainly save many lives.
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, it might be ineffective even if governments make a lot of effort
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into
 saving less widely languages. The lack of willingness to study for a reason, it might be impractical for them. So that, government
should not encourages
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should not encourage
 people to learn if they not willing to.
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, the government should focus on improving crucial sectors
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 of wasting a lot of
many
the most common medium of exchange; functions as legal tender
money
.
On the other hand
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, every nation has its own traditional
language
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 which is spoken by their ancestors and descendant; and they have been using for many generations. If an endangered
language
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 does extinct,
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 it means that its cultural identity may
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 disappear and
also
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 knowledge about
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 civilization remains unknown. By spending money on minority
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 preservation, a vast amount of cultural heritages can be saved in the meantime. In conclusion, while it is true that saving local languages is crucial for some people, in my opinion, it is more important for the government to invest in essential services like
healthcare
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health care
 and education.
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