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Several languages are in danger of extinction because they are spoken by very small numbers of people. Some people say that governments should spend public money on saving these languages, while others believe that would be a waste of money. Discuss both of these views and give your opinion.

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It is true that some languages are in danger of dying. Many people hold the view that governments should spend
money
 on preserving these languages, while others feel it is was
te of
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a waste
money
. Personally, I believe that these languages should be saved. There are several reasons why saving languages are was
te of
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a waste
money
.
Firstly
, It is clear that extinction languages are spoken by small numbers of people and It is not beneficial to save them.
For example
, If governments spend
money
 on literature or art in order to save their languages, It cannot give nothing useful for people and governments. Because musicians and writers who speak in dyi
ng tongue ca
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a dying tongue
nnot be well known or appreciated around the world.
This
money
 might be better spent on other public services.
Secondly
, It would be cheaper and more beneficial to have only
one
 language. Governments could save up their budget by cutting all kinds of costs related to making communication with each minority group. Despite above arguments, I think that public
money
 should be spent on saving these languages.
First
 of all, everybody knows that
one
 language strongly related with countries' history, tradition and culture.
Furthermore
, If
one
 language dies, It means that people who speak
this
 tongue will lose their identity and their history of life. Before languages become extinct, governments should take some steps in order to preserve languages.
In add
ition by sp
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addition, by
ending
money
 on protecting languages, government can preserve traditions, customs and behaviours that part of a
one
 person's history. In conclusion, It is clear that some languages are dying out, but governments shouldn't save
money
 by allowing them to disappear.
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