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some people believe that children should not be given homework everyday, while others believe that they must get homework everyday in orter to be successful at school. discuss both sides and give your opinion.

#people #children #homework #orter #school
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Children who take to study at primary
school
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, middle
school
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 or high
school
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 their brain develops during
this
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 period.
teachers
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Teachers
 or instructors must be careful when they choose teaching means.
in
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In
 my opinion,
homework
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are
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is
essential part
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an essential part
 of studying, in additional, they help to improve pupils' brain.
when
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When
 we learn something at
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lesson
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lesson, then
then
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 we must use them
at
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in
 practice because practice makes perfect.
if
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If
 we do not do
homework
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 about
topic
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a topic
topics
the topic
 that we learn at
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school we
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school, we
 can forget them during
short term
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a short term
the short term
.
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homework
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Homework
 exercises help us
at
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in
 comprehensive learning process.
another
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Another
 reason is time
,
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,
in other words
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, we have a little time at the
school
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 for comprehensive learning.
it
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It
 is impossible that learning all topics during 45 minutes or one hour,
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, teachers should give
homework
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.
according
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According
 to some reason we can agree with
othet
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 people that they say
homework
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 is not necessary for children.
nowadays
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Nowadays
, children tend to play with game
consuls
a small table fixed to a wall or designed to stand against a wall
consoles
 or in fresh air,
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, they want to learn everything at the
lesson
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.
some
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Some
 teachers give to children numerous exercises, and
at
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as
 a result, pupils fed up with
education system
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the education system
an education system
.
insturctors
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Instructors
Insturctors
 should teach
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lesson
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a lesson
lessons
the lesson
 and
besides
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, they should do some homeworks with children
at
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in
 the
lesson
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.
in
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In
 conclusion, homeworks are important for all
children but
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children, but
 teachers must be careful when they choose
quantity
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the quantity
 of homeworks.

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