sense of competition in children should be encouraged

Every step in our life we meet some problems,
somedifficulties
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some difficulties
. Every time when we meet those problems we ask ourselves why others can solve that, what is the motivation or What is that secret. And later we understand that secret has
name
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a name
ans
in order to; used instead of "to", especially after try, come, go
and
that is
competition.
Nowdays
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Nowadays
our children compete only for phones. Who has new phone and if there will be someone who has latest phone they will go home and ask to their parents that they want it either. They do not think that there are other causes for what they can fight.
This
problem comes from their parents. Because they teach their children that they can have what they want.
Sure they
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Sure, they
will
encourge
contribute to the progress or growth of
encourage
them but not like that. They will
encourege
contribute to the progress or growth of
encourage
them to be smart, explain that in our world they should find themselves and it can come true to be
differen
unlike in nature or quality or form or degree
different
.
This
is what we should
encourege
contribute to the progress or growth of
encourage
in our children. In my opinion children like dough how you
create them they
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create them, they
will grow up like that so how we start they will continue like that. And for that not only
paents
a father or mother; one who begets or one who gives birth to or nurtures and raises a child; a relative who plays the role of guardian
parents
paints
patients
but
also
teachers should motivate them, teach them not live in the case. Sometimes school teaches more
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
parents. It gives us to find solutions and go ahead.

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