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You are going to take a short holiday in Singapore and you want to rent a holiday apartment while you are there. Write to the tourist information office. In your letter: • explain what you need • say when you plan to be there • ask for information about prices Begin your letter as follows: Dear Mr/Ms __________

#holiday #singapore #rent #apartment #tourist #information #office #plan #prices #mr #ms #__________
Dear Mr/Ms I hope
this
 letter finds you well. I am Tom Ferdi and I have planned a vacation to Singapore for two weeks with my girlfriend. I would like to rent a luxury apartment with one bedroom close to
city
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 because I do not have much time to spend on travel. I really appreciate
if
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 I
will
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 be able to get a place with all the access. I have planned my holiday
on
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for
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15th
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the 15th
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 of June, and we hope to come there on
17th
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the 17th
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 of June because we expect to stay two nights in a hotel room. As I know June is not a
peek
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 period for tourists and we will be able
check
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 in on time.
Furthermore
, I would like to know about the prices of holiday
apartment
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apartments
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 for two weeks and
ot
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it
 would be great if you could offer some discount on us. One of my best friends recommended and I hope everything will be smooth. I would
also
 want to know the price
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with
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 breakfast and dinner. I am looking forward
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from
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 your reply and once I get
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the
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all the details, I will confirm the booking. Yours sincerely Tom Ferdi
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coherence cohesion
Consider breaking down long sentences into shorter ones to enhance readability.
coherence cohesion
Organize your request more clearly by separating the sections with paragraph breaks, especially when mentioning the dates, needs, and price inquiry.
task achievement
The letter covers all the essential points: explaining the need, indicating the planned dates, and asking for price information.
task achievement
The tone of your letter is polite and suitable for the context, reflecting a good level of formal writing.
coherence cohesion
Your opening and closing are appropriately formulated, creating a good impression.
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