IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6

You are going to take a short holiday in Singapore and you want to rent a holiday apartment while you are there. Write to the tourist information office. In your letter: • explain what you need • say when you plan to be there • ask for information about prices Begin your letter as follows: Dear Mr/Ms __________

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Dear Mr/Ms I hope
this
Linking Words
 letter finds you well. I am Tom Ferdi and I have planned a vacation to Singapore for two weeks with my girlfriend. I would like to rent a luxury apartment with one bedroom close to
city
Add an article
the city
show examples
 because I do not have much time to spend on travel. I really appreciate
if
Correct pronoun usage
it if
show examples
 I
will
Wrong verb form
would
show examples
 be able to get a place with all the access. I have planned my holiday
on
Change preposition
for
show examples
15th
Correct article usage
the 15th
show examples
 of June, and we hope to come there on
17th
Correct article usage
the 17th
show examples
 of June because we expect to stay two nights in a hotel room. As I know June is not a
peek
Correct your spelling
peak
show examples
 period for tourists and we will be able
check
Add the particle
to check
show examples
 in on time.
Furthermore
Linking Words
, I would like to know about the prices of holiday
apartment
Fix the agreement mistake
apartments
show examples
 for two weeks and
ot
Correct your spelling
it
 would be great if you could offer some discount on us. One of my best friends recommended and I hope everything will be smooth. I would
also
Linking Words
 want to know the price
Change preposition
for
show examples
with
Change preposition
for
show examples
 breakfast and dinner. I am looking forward
Change preposition
to
show examples
from
Change preposition
to
show examples
 your reply and once I get
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
all the details, I will confirm the booking. Yours sincerely Tom Ferdi

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

coherence cohesion
Consider breaking down long sentences into shorter ones to enhance readability.
coherence cohesion
Organize your request more clearly by separating the sections with paragraph breaks, especially when mentioning the dates, needs, and price inquiry.
task achievement
The letter covers all the essential points: explaining the need, indicating the planned dates, and asking for price information.
task achievement
The tone of your letter is polite and suitable for the context, reflecting a good level of formal writing.
coherence cohesion
Your opening and closing are appropriately formulated, creating a good impression.
What to do next:
Look at other essays: