Nowadays, adults do little exercise. Some people believe that the best way to address this issue is by covering great sports events such as Olympics on television. Others think it is more beneficial to take other measures. What is your opinion?

In these day’s adults are less engaged in exercising activities. Some believe telecasting great sports like
the Olympics
will help improving the situation, whereas
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others believe there are various other options to spur adults doing exercising. In my
opinion there
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opinion, there
are numerous ways adults can do more exercising. The main reason adults are doing less exercise is due to their sedentary lifestyle. With the ever increasing competition in fields of study and jobs, people spend their majority of time doing that.
, the
measure to be taken is to educate regarding benefits of exercising, as it is said “Healthy Body Healthy Mind”. As research has
proven engaging
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proven, engaging
in exercising activities make
the mind
more peaceful and stress free. In India people have now been seen doing yoga on
daily basis
a daily basis
after they were educated regarding the benefits to all by the Prime Minister. The
initiative which
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initiative, which
could be taken for making people exercise regularly is to have general parks with some of the standard exercising equipment’s. As all cannot afford to go to
the gym
a gym
or pay monthly for enrolling in exercising activities. To exemplify, government of India has now taken initiatives for building many more parks in cities with
common gymnasium
a common gymnasium
for citizens.
one can take a brisk walk in
the park
every morning, as brisk walking is considered to be one of the best exercises. Governments my form policies to allot work duration, so that, people can spend time doing other activities. In
essay I discussed my opinion why other measures to be taken for exercising rather than telecasting Olympics or other sports,
as, yoga, brisk walking and having restricted working hours set by the government so as to can have time for doing exercise

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