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Happiness is considered very important in life. Why is it difficult to define*. What factors are important in achieving happiness.?

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The most vital among other things in a person's
life
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 is
happiness
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.
Happiness
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 is hard to define, as
peoples
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peoples'
 perspective varies in describing it.
Happiness
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 is difficult to describe because its meaning is different for different individuals. It's a feeling which is impossible to gauge.
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, some people find pleasure in earning, whereas for others helping a fellow human being give their heart enjoy of contentment.
Happiness
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 is an intrinsic nature of
human being
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human beings
the human being
, so its definition cannot be fully
comprehend
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comprehended
.
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 it seems almost impossible to give a precise definition of
happiness
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, most people would agree that there are some preconditions
to achieve
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achieving
 it.
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firstly
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Firstly
, it is hard for a person to be happy if he or she doesn't have a safe place to live and enough food to eat.
Basic necessity
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A basic necessity
The basic necessity
Basic necessities
 of
life
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 must be met in order to be happy.
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, the greatest joy in
life
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 is usually found in sharing experiences with family and friends, and it is rare to find a person who is content to live in isolation.
other
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Other
 factors could be individual freedom, aspiration to achieve something or a sense of purpose in
life
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. To conclude,
happiness
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 is difficult to define because it is particular to each individual, but I believe that our basic needs for shelter, food, clothes and company are a road towards
happiness
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 and experiencing it.
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