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When talking about success, we often think of people who are rich or famous. In your opinion, what are the qualities that characterise a successful person? Why do you think these should be the criteria? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is everyone's desire to be a winner in life,
however
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 a school of thoughts believe that richness is a true success, unless
numbers
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the numbers
 of
honors
a university degree with honors
honours
homes
 held as an example to counter
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 practice. An essay intends to iron out all
true affecting
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true, affecting
 factors and their nooks. It is irrefutable, that being wealthy is like a feather on a cap, they always have to face less trouble and tolerance in life,
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 an esteem becomes quite obvious to them.
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, other factors
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 outright the affection like
this
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 totally depends on
person's domain
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the person's domain
 and their faithful character, a fruitful personality demands all relevant exercise as per their field. For instinct, after burning a midnight oil a student may manage to score
first
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class but
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class, but
 what if he fails to get an appropriate job?
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Further more
in addition
Furthermore
, the world is developing on the edge of
a
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A
sword where
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sword, where
 every little term has become essential to have. Today terms like character, self-esteem, loyalty, kindness are of paramount importance to earn respect and eventually a respectful person can be recognized as of real
successful
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success
.
For example
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. Dr. A.P.J Abdul Kalam is well known for his humble and helpful nature, though he was always welcomed to become
rich but
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rich, but
 his instinct depicted a noble image of him into the public today, undoubtedly he'll be
potrayed
represented graphically by sketch or design or lines
portrayed
 as a hero forever and on
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 side Donald Trump, might be rich and respectful only as a president of
USA
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the USA
, there is no future of his fame after that. Richness might get vandalized
tomorrow but
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tomorrow, but
 a true respect will remain untouched and protected for centuries,
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 plethora of examples
are
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is
 available,
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 it is an exasperating scenario where
myraid
too numerous to be counted
myriad
 can only think of wealthy people when they need any inspiration. To recapitulate, I deplore the logic of only giving dignity to wealthy people and in my opinion other mentioned factors can be more impactful if a goal is of permanent success.
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