Some people think that in the modern society individuals are becoming more dependent on each other while others say that individuals are becoming more independent of each other. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In personal, social and professional life people today have become more independent due to a number of reasons.
However
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, there is an opposing view that modern lifestyles have forced people to become more dependent on each other. Both perspectives are analysed in
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essay.
Firstly
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, a major reason for people being more independent today is the financial freedom they enjoy, especially by the young people.
For instance
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, more and more young people do part time jobs during their studies and many of them are employed immediately after their secondary education.
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gives them greater self-reliance as they need not depend on their parents for their economic needs.
Secondly
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,
emergence
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the emergence
of technology and
Internet
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the Internet
has
also
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given a great deal of freedom to people to perform many activities without depending on others.
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, computerisation of offices, Bank ATMs, online commerce and modern household appliances have reduced the dependence of people on others.
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, there are others who hold the view that dependence on others has become more prominent in modern life. They cite the example of modern
work places
a place where work is done
workplaces
where
team work
cooperative work done by a team (especially when it is effective)
teamwork
and coordination among various departments
play
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plays
vital role in the success of any particular business. Even in scientific developments group activity is more crucial than individual achievements. In my opinion, people have become more dependent on others in greater number activities, despite the freedom they enjoy in certain areas. In conclusion, while people have become independent in some aspects, dependence on others have increased in many areas of modern life.
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, we are all part of a society and it is not possible for us not to depend on others.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • interdependence
  • globalized economy
  • collaborative work environments
  • crowd-sourced
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