Some people think that in the modern society individuals are becoming more dependent on each other while others say that individuals are becoming more independent of each other. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In personal, social and professional life people today have become more independent due to a number of reasons.

However

, there is an opposing view that modern lifestyles have forced people to become more dependent on each other. Both perspectives are analysed in

this

essay.

Firstly

, a major reason for people being more independent today is the financial freedom they enjoy, especially by the young people.

For instance

, more and more young people do part time jobs during their studies and many of them are employed immediately after their secondary education.

This

gives them greater self-reliance as they need not depend on their parents for their economic needs.

Secondly

emergence

Suggestion

the emergence

of technology and

Internet

Suggestion

the Internet

has

also

given a great deal of freedom to people to perform many activities without depending on others.

For example

, computerisation of offices, Bank ATMs, online commerce and modern household appliances have reduced the dependence of people on others.

On the other hand

, there are others who hold the view that dependence on others has become more prominent in modern life. They cite the example of modern

work places

a place where work is done

workplaces

where

team work

cooperative work done by a team (especially when it is effective)

teamwork

and coordination among various departments

play

Suggestion

plays

vital role in the success of any particular business. Even in scientific developments group activity is more crucial than individual achievements. In my opinion, people have become more dependent on others in greater number activities, despite the freedom they enjoy in certain areas. In conclusion, while people have become independent in some aspects, dependence on others have increased in many areas of modern life.

Although

, we are all part of a society and it is not possible for us not to depend on others.

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Topic Vocabulary:

interdependence
globalized economy
collaborative work environments
crowd-sourced
empowered
perception
availability
autonomy
reliance
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