with deforestation, urban development and illegal hunting, many species are becoming endangered and some are even facing extinction. Do you think it is important to protect animals? What can be done to deal with this problem?

mankind
Suggestion
Mankind
and animal kingdom have always been in the race of survival since the evolution. But since
we
Suggestion
We
humans have been gifted with a great intellect, we have the ability to develop the surrounding
environment
Suggestion
Environment
and society. And as our quantity expanded we started replacing the trees around us with our new homes, forgetting the fact that some species do dwell in them as well. Adding to that torture, we kill them to feed
ourselves which
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ourselves, which
apparently scares them away.
it
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It
is evident that we're developing at a much greater pace than before, but we often fail to notice the cost we are paying, degrading nature,
animals
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animal
species getting
extint
the point or degree to which something extends
extent
extinct
to name a few. I strongly believe the we are to blame for
this
majorly, because our hobbies like hunting are making them endangered and it is our duty to help replenish the gaps caused in their world due to us as much as we can.
we
Suggestion
We
need to protect them because the form our ecosystem. According to me there are a few measures we can take to prevent
this
from happening in future.
First
is planting more trees, they turn into forests which is their
home but
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home, but
not just
that but
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that, but
they are
also
our primary source of oxygen as well.
Second
is trying to reduce illegal hunting
activites
any specific behavior
activities
activists
, it is barbaric to adapt
hobbies which
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hobbies, which
harm living organisms, we have not right to do so.
Infrastructual
development can be done without harming the surrounding and if
such
a task Is needed to be followed the it becomes out responsibility to compensate the damages, because we need animals as much as they need us.
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