You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Competitiveness is a positive quality for people in most societies. How does competitiveness affect individuals? Is it a positive or negative trend? You should write at least 250 words.

It is often believed that it is
good characteristic
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a good characteristic
for people to have a sense of competition in most cultures. In my opinion,
competitiveness
among employees is beneficial,
however
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however, this
this
quality in daily
life
is more negative.
This
essay will describe how it affects to humans. On the one hand, having
sense
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a sense
of competition is
positive
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positively
in the working environment.
In other words
, competitions help people to grow professionally and make a career. According to the research of Harvard University, more than 75 percent of employees who was promoted in the
first
3 years had sense of competition.
Moreover
, 9 out of 10 top managers compete with others.
Therefore
, I think that being ambitious in the workplace is
great trait
Suggestion
a great trait
, which helps to career.
On the other hand
,
competitiveness
in the daily
life
is counted as being jealous.
In other words
, society does not accept envy human in their environment.
For instance
, according to
American Psychological Association person
Suggestion
an American Psychological Association person
American Psychological Association people
the American Psychological Association person
, who always compares himself with others, starts to
degradate
reduce the level of land, as by erosion
degrade
. Especially, when
human
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the human
wants to have the same cloth,
staff
the tangible substance that goes into the makeup of a physical object
stuff
like "new
IPhone
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iPhone
" or "
IMac
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iMac
", or even family, and wastes his energy to the negative emotions. People must compare himself only with him yesterday
that is
why I think
that man
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that this man is
this
is more negative quality. To conclude,
however most
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however, most
societies think that
competitiveness
is
advantage personal skill
Suggestion
an advantageous personal skill
advantageous personal skill
, it depends on usage of quality in daily
life
or workplace. So,
competitiveness
in the workplace is positive characteristics, but in routine
life
it is more negative.
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