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Some people think that government should subsidize fruits and vegetables to make healthy food cheaper. Other argue that text should be set on on healthy food. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #government #fruits #vegetables #food #text
Government is the head and citizens are the body of the
country
. So, to control and take care of
this
 citizen,
administration
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the administration
 is mandatory.
as
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As
 many people
says
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say
have said
 that government should provide subsidies for healthy
food
. While other thinks that authority should put the tax on unhealthy
food
.
This
 essay will articulate on both the sides of the statement with my opinion in the following paradigms with the pertinent instances.
Firstly
, if the government
provide
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provides
 subsidies for healthy
food
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food, then
then
 no one in the
country
 will suffer from
hungerness
a physiological need for food; the consequence of food deprivation
hungers
. The majority of farmers are dying nowadays because of starvation, if
this
 offer will provide more to farmers
then
 it would be helpful for
whole
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the whole country
country
. To cite an
example farmers
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example, farmers
 are the only inhabitants who farms vegetables and fruits for whole Nations and after selling their all crops, farmers are surviving due to
famination
the process whereby seeds or spores sprout and begin to grow
germination
fascination
 because the dealer of the crops are not giving a handsome amount of money to farmers. So,
this
 way the farmers are dying nowadays. On the other side, many people said that to increase the price of
an
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a
 healthy
food
 like fast foods. In
this
 current scenario, fast
food
 allures the younger generation
in
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on
into
 account of look and taste. As many people prefer to eat on healthy
food
 when they are home alone because they do not want to cook
the healthy
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healthier
food
. To extend, nowadays delivering of
food
 plays an important role in many individuals ordering
food
 from
this
 delivery
applications
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application
. So, if
regime
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the regime
 should put a tax on unhealthy
food
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
 many individuals will eat healthy
food
 at home and consuming of fresh
food
 can make the people and the
country
 healthy. To put it in a nutshell, my opinion is that government should provide subsidies on healthy
food
 and
also
 set a tax on unhealthy
food
.
This
 will change the health of the individuals as I
have mention
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have mentioned
 the two major reasons of the statement in the above paragraphs.
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