Do you agree or disagree?: "Science is better than Religion".

In
this
modern era people are intelligent
enought
as much as necessary
enough
to always see the reason behind everything
,
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,
which is not believing
blindlying
for things we do and hear.
Incase
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In case
of
science
and
religion both
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religion, both
plays
an
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a
gigantic excerpt
in
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of
our day to day life. Even if people believe in
religion
far before than
science
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science, however
however
, both have
reasonable way
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a reasonable way
of showing their theory.
Firstly in my
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Firstly, in my
point of view both
science
and
religion
are important in its own
way but
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way, but
in
this
21st century
science
is playing a greater role.
For instance
, in today's world people are very dependent on high technology like mobile, buses, metro
,
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,
internet
so on which
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so on, which
soon which
has made our working time easier with short time distance and
also
we can gain current trend information within
second
.
Secondly
,
science
has
also
helped in
development
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the development
of our health condition.
For instance
, due to man-made destruction of
environment
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the environment
and wild animals it has caused huge
problems
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Problems
in our environment and health
such
as currently in China there
is
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are
wide spread
widely circulated or diffused
widespread
of
disease
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a disease
the disease
called corona virus which is able to detect due to scientific development in research and hospital technologies
likewise
till now we are able to tackle serious diseases due to our scientists and doctors.
Lastly
,
science
take
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takes
huge excerpt
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a huge excerpt
in all the things
for
instance
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instance, science
science
is present in math, biology, chemical reaction, geography
,
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,
it helps to spread our knowledge to large media. It
also
helps in developing
great relationship
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great relationships
a great relationship
with our
neighborhood
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neighbouring
neighbourhood
countries by exchanging of our goods to
develope
make something new, such as a product or a mental or artistic creation
develop
own country.If
science
is not present our
world must
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world, must
have not developed. To summarise,
religion
has
help
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helped
us to believe in self and for mental stability
compare
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comparable
to that
science
is greater as it helped us to know about
world
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the world
in a
second
.
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