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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Boxing is a blood sport which often results in physical injury. It is inappropriate for this sport to exist in the modern age. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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It is often argued that boxing is a cruel
sport
 that leads to the health problems in the future. It is
also
 believed that there is no place for boxing in our society. I completely disagree with
this
 point of view and I think that boxing is one of the athletic types, which help to protect ourselves and be healthy.
First
 of all, boxing is a battle where human may learn to defend himself.
In other words
, boxing is a physical activity and All trainers,
for instance
, teach their students not no use their power against the people. Boxers are allowed to use their strength only in competitions. In the case of danger for life boxers may protect themselves.
Moreover
, it is important not to break rules of safety during fighting and you do not get any injuries in the result.
Therefore
, I think that boxing is not a blood
sport
 at all.
Secondly
, boxing is a
sport
, which makes people healthier as any other type of
sport
.
In other words
, people, who do box keep fit.
For example
, Olympic games' champion of 1996, 2000 and 2004 Ermakhan Ibraimov
is
Suggestion
are
 a trainer of the National boxing team. He teaches his students how to mix boxing and health. If you do exercises every day, you will reduce health issues.
Therefore
, boxing is a way of being healthy. To conclude, some people think that boxing is a tough
sport
 with non-human rules.
However
, it is
sport
 to defend yourself and as any kind of
sport
 in case of following safety rules you stay healthy.
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