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Some people believe that children should be given lessons on how to manage money in the school .Do you agree or disagree ?

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Other people are with the idea that children must be taught about how to handle their finances at their learning centres.I concur with
this
 idea.
This
 essay is going to support my opinion.
First
 and foremost
,
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,
children ought to be taught how to handle their finances well when they are still very young.It is the responsibility of both teachers and parents to teach their kids on how to manage money.
Mostly
Suggestion
Most
 children spend much of their time at school so their teachers have a significant influence on them.
Howev
er
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,children spend most of their time at home so parents are solel
y inchar
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in charge
ge of educating them how to use money wisely
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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