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Some people say modern innovations bring a lot of problems than benefits. Do you agree or disagree ?

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Escalation in technology has brought
comforts
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the comforts
 of great extent right into people's
hands which
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hands, which
 they can avail by a click.
However
, many people consider that these ameliorations as proved to have had more deleterious effects than positive ones.I vehemently concede that latest inventions certainly have more demerits than merits. Predominant reason to support my view is that though the ease that these innovations avail to humans has sky rocketed but at the same time the pernicious effects they have both on
environment
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the environment
 and living beings cannot be neglected or justified. The noxious emissions from automobiles and air conditioners has degraded the quality of
air making
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air, making
 it unfit to breath in.And
this
further
results
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result
 in inflicting many with
number
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a number
 of respiratory diseases and the studies
have shown
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has shown
 that people prone to
such
 health hazards have inclined over the years. Another reason in line with my ideology is that
instead
 of modern gadgets being an aid for house chores, people have surrendered themselves to them and rely entirely on them for
even tiniest bit
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even tiniest bits
the even tiniest bit
 of work.
This
 has turned
population
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the population
 into caving into sedentary and lethargic lifestyle which again causes
multitude
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a multitude
 of diseases, obesity being the leading health hassle which births many serious maladies. Ergo
,
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,
agglomerating above mentioned points it can be concluded that modern innovations are a bane that in one or the other way causes
number
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a number
 of diseases which affects both humans and environment negatively.

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