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The prevention of health problems and illness is more important than treatment and medicine. Government funding should reflect this. To what extent so you agree?

#prevention #health #illness #treatment #medicine #government
Curing the health issues using medication must be secondary priority of
government
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the government
 and preventing the disease should be the
first
hence
,
government
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the government
 should allocate
more fund
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more funding
 for preventing the ailments
instead
 of treating it. It
am
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is
 in partial agreement with the statement,
government
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the government
 should have a balanced approach in
this
 case.
Firstly
, taking the preventive measures is always a long term approach as it will lower down the financial pressure on the
government
 and citizens by saving them from hefty hospital bills. Educating children an
parents
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parent
 about the disease and its reasons can help more in preventing contiguous diseases. No doubt, there are lots of technological advancements and science research have been done even though curing HIV AIDS is not
possible, only it
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only possible, it
 can be prevented by education
campins
a race between candidates for elective office
campaigns
 or the disorder
such
 as sugar which occur due to the heredity from
parents
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parents'
parent's
 genes can be
sort
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sorted
 by placing
ineffected
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in effected
 DNA and saving
new born
recently born
newborn
 from pain and big bills of medicine and hospitals. Treating epidemic diseases
is
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are
also
 necessary as they can not
left
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leave
 without treatment because it will lead to low life expectancy for
such
 patients.
For example
, cancer patients are needed
to treated
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to treat
 well and funds are required for new technology for treating
such
 contiguous
ailment
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ailing
hence
 chemotherapy came into exist and it became easy to cure the
paitent
a person who requires medical care
patient
patients
. Curing a disease is
costly but
Accept comma addition
costly, but
 it is necessary. All in all, I can say that
government
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the government
 should allocate funds as per the requirement of both the phases because both are necessary and requires attention.

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