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The prevention of health problems and illness is more important than treatment and medicine

#prevention #health #illness #treatment #medicine
Government
Suggestion
The government
 should make
awareness
 among people that preventing a disease is more important in the
first
 place than contracting a disease and
then
 opting for treatment.I totally agree
to
Suggestion
with
 the idea and the best way to keep oneself physically fit is daily exercise.
Health
 is important for physical and mental well being of people.It is the duty of
government
 to make basic
health
 facilities available to its citizen
be
Suggestion
is
 its rich or poor.For
this
government
 has set an extended
health
 system comprising of basic
health
 units and tertiary
health
 units.
Health
 specialist all over the world are of the view that
its
it is
it's
 better to prevent contagious and life threatening diseases rather than treating it after getting caught by the disease.In
this
regard
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regard, government
government
 should make
awareness
 among people by starting campaigns involving
printing
Suggestion
print
 and visual media
.
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.
Moreover they
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Moreover, they
 should induct
health
 professionals who should go to far flung areas and educate people where no other means of communication are possible.One
such
 example is
polio
Suggestion
a polio awareness program
the polio awareness program
awareness
 program as polio has eradicated in
developed
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developing
countries but
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countries, but
its
it is
it's
 still there in developing countries like Pakistan
,
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,
where our country is taking all the necessary measures to educate people and clear their myths and misconceptions.
on
Suggestion
On
 the other
hand most
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hand, most
 people believe that its
not only duty
Suggestion
not only a duty
 of
government
 to provide
facility but
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facility, but
 individual effort on his/her part is
also
 necessary. To keep oneself fit he should have a healthy lifestyle with daily exercise
.
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.
One should avoid sedentary
life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
 that leads to obesity and is the root cause of various diseases.
thus in
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Thus, in
Thus in
 my opinion in order to prevent diseases and have a healthy life
government
 should spend a good amount of its annual budget and make reforms to create
awareness
 among people.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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