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The best way of motivating workers is to offer them performance-based pay packets. Do you agree or disagree?

#workers #offer #packets
In today's world
work
 place is
one
 of the challenging and motivating
one
. In our day to day activity to improve the skill and
dedicatication
 towards
work
 motivation is required.
However motivation
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However, motivation
 is
one of factor to
Suggestion
one factor to
 improve focus on
work
. I will agree with offering performance pay as a motivation to the worker. Ultimately at the end of the
day every
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day, every
one
 will get satisfied
by
Suggestion
with
 the amount how much they are earning. I believe if the basic needs of employee get satisfied
one
 should be happy at
work
 place
this
 will leads their quality of
work
. If it
get
Suggestion
gets
 recognized they can
work
 more skillfull in an encouraging environment.
Finally
, I will completely agree with the point performance pay can motivate a worker at his
work
 place.

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