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Some people think that tourism is one of the helpful ways to increase a countries state. However, others believe that tourism can only damage traditional rules bringing own affect to a society and cause other troubles. To what extent do you agree with?

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According to some people,
tourism
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 is an effective way to develop the country, still there are arguments against
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 claiming what
tourism
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 has a bad
affect
a phenomenon that follows and is caused by some previous phenomenon
effect
 to national traditions and other aspects of lifestyle of
society
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the society
. I fully agree with the
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 statement. On the one hand,
tourism
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 is one of the great ways not only to increase countries
economy but
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economy, but
also
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 organize the relations between nations. It promotes international understanding and cooperation among nations. If we take Singapore, Malaysia and the UAE as
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an
 example,
big proportion
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a big proportion
 of their economy is based on
tourism
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, though there are some bad effect to environment and traditions of
country
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the country
.
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,
tourism
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 plays a key role in economic growth by providing job opportunities, encouraging regional development, increasing foreign exchange earnings, and enhancing higher standard of living for local communities. It is clear that myriad tourists need for local guides. The more tourists come for travel purposes, the more guides will be hired by travel agencies. As well, in Canada and Japan, because of lack of labour force, there is great need for foreign workers. That's why they can do job offer and permanent residency for tourists who come from abroad. In conclusion,
tourism
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 plays a main role to raise the economic balance of any country. Add to that it is considered as a significant source of revenue.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • boost
  • economy
  • cultural exchange
  • over-tourism
  • environmental impacts
  • cultural heritage
  • strain
  • local resources
  • commercialization
  • traditions
  • exacerbate
  • inequality
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