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The prevention of health problems and illness is more important than treatment and medicine. Government should reflect this. To what extent do you agree

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There is a saying that prevention is better than cure. There are many ways by which we can prevent illness. Government
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major role in the wellness of their citizens by preventing diseases. I agree to that fact and the explanations are given in the ensuring paragraph. Each individual should have the responsibility of taking care of themselves, by being away from illness, protecting from sick people. Some measures should be taken from governm
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to improve the health of their citizens, which includes providing health education for people to protect themselves and family from getting sick. Ensuring that all are getting vaccinated on regular basi
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a regular basis
tant fact. Government should check the percentage of people getting vaccination
and for tho
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vaccinated
se who are reluctant, there should be proper guidance on how it improves their well-being.
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 cleanliness is the best way to prevent diseases. Government should be keen on keeping the streets and surroundings clean. Government should keep some fines if someone breaks these rules, and
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 people will be more responsible. Influence of
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well being
cribed above. If those are followed correctly, everyone can lead a good life.
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