In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

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Health and fitness are the critical issues that should be concerned

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everyone. In the other side, we can relate these issues with obesity symptom. In my opinion, people who

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less physical activity will tend to easily get increasing weight. After that, it will cause

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decreased

health and fitness. If we want to solve

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problem, the solution is to persuade people more active in their daily life. The

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issues is to decide the best method to persuade people to be more active in physical activity. To get the best method for

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case, it will more effective if we can optimize increasing social media user. In

social media era

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the social media era

, there is a phenomena when public figure can be

very effective influencer

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a very effective influence

very effective influence

and called “Socmed Influencer”. Now, Socmed Influencer only showing glamour lifestyle like travelling, culinary,

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. If they can shift their focus from the glamour lifestyle to

healthy lifestyle

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a healthy lifestyle

, I will give much impact to society.

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Lexical resource: 5.0

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sedentary
obesity
overweight
physical activity
sedentary lifestyle
exercise
unhealthy diet
fast food
urbanization
modernization
stress
awareness
education
government intervention
policies
promotion
sports
fitness programs
health education
taxation
public transportation
infrastructure
parks
recreational spaces

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In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

Fully explain your ideas

Fewer young people play sports these days. Why is this? What can be done to encourage more young people to do sports?

Schools should prepare students for the labour market and not waste tme and resources on theoretcal knowledge. Do you agree or disagree?

Some people believe that using a bicycle as a main form of transportation has a lot of advantages whereas others think it has many disadvantages. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.