Nowadays, some parents pressure their children to be successful in a specific field. What are the reasons? Is it a positive or negative development ?

In
current world
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the current world
, parents are very fond of their
children
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children's
carrers
the particular occupation for which you are trained
careers
such
that they started literally pressuring them to be successful in
specific
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a specific field
the specific field
specific fields
field
in which some
childs
a young person of either sex
children
are not interested. I would like to illustrate some incident that happened recently near my house. John and Rose had a son named
tim
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Tim
, his aspiration is to become an IAS
collector but
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collector, but
his father wants him to shine in IT
field
. He started forcing
tim
objective case of they
them
to become
an
Suggestion
a
software engineer. For his father's sake, he studied computer science course and selected in campus interview. As we all aware that IT sector earns a lot of
money but
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money, but
tim
an instance or single occasion for some event
time
Tim
was not
satsified
filled with satisfaction
satisfied
with his job as he was thinking over and over and
finally
got depressed.
Finally
, he
become
Suggestion
becomes
very stressed and his health started getting worse.
Later his
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Later, his
father
recongnised
generally approved or compelling recognition
recognized
his fault and allowed
tim
objective case of they
them
to proceed with his dream. According to me, pressuring children without interest in
specific
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a specific field
field
is a
neagtive
characterized by or displaying negation or denial or opposition or resistance; having no positive features
negative
development which we have to avoid in today's world as it cause the young generation to be more disheartened.
Hence
, parents should know their
children
Suggestion
child's
children's
interest in some
field
and should motivate and
encourge
contribute to the progress or growth of
encourage
encourages
them to excel in life.

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