Some people think that when a person travel into different culture they should adapt to the local culture and custom. To what extent do you agree and disagree?

It is sometimes argued that
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
to
different
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a different culture
culture
is
caused
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causing
people change their
culture
and should adjust to traditional activities and convention. I completely disagree with
this
idea
that a person forces
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that forces a person
that a person force
that a person force force
to conform
with
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to
the native
culture
of the country that they enter in as a
traveler
a person who changes location
traveller
.
Firstly
, With the advent of globalization and extending of cultural relativism people in worldwide have learned to accept and respect diversity
culture
. As
result
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a result
of
relativism no
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relativism, no
culture
is strange and individual were able to live everywhere according to their folklores. These phenomena pave the way for resident, living in
foreign country
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a foreign country
foreign countries
without compulsion to accommodate to traditional standard in abroad and what is more they can continue living there with their own tradition.
Secondly
,
although
acculturation process
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the acculturation process
among cultures is
inevitable it
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inevitable, it
does not mean
this
trend is obligated. Not only acculturation is not obligated and
unilateral but
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unilateral, but
also
is mutual and
voluntarily
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voluntary
. People voluntarily decide to adapt local
culture
and custom or
not
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not, for
for
example there
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example, there
are many people live in other
countries but
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countries, but
, they still their own and tradition, as well as there are people who have converted their
culture
generally, people have the voluntary choose. To sum up, I personally refuse
this
statement that a person who travels in different
culture
should adjust to traditional standard and custom. Globalization and voluntarily are two main factors for people to live without constrain to adjust foreign
culture
. Cultural relativism
provide
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provides
appropriated situation for all individuals in various cultures live together freely and
also
people acquire and adjust to
culture
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the culture
in acculturation processes voluntarily.

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