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People today generally have better lives than people in the past did. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is undeniable that the span of life is changing day by day and year by year.
While
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 some
people
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 still believe that
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 days are better, I would argue that the technological advancements and the development of countries are essential factors in making their lives better.
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 with, one of the most critical factors for seeking better lives is technology.
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 is
due to
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 the fact
that is
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 that it has a significant role in making life faster and more convenient than ever before.
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,
people
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 have not been able to send a letter within a couple of seconds as emails do, and they have to wait weeks and sometimes months until it
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.
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, if
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 letter included critical information
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 delayed or even lost,
people
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 would get lost and frustrated as well.
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, nowadays, the development of countries is essential to obtain a decent lifestyle. Developed countries around the globe always have plans, whether for education, health, transportation
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 their aim is to see their citizens live
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an appropriate life.
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, the Canadian Government had recently established a new way for harvesting crops. Farmers in Canada are suffering from the bad weather almost all
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the
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year that makes it impossible for them to grow up, and
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in
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this
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 way, the government is still searching for possible solutions to make it easier for them to live.
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, if
this
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 did not happen through the
Canadian’s
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 authorities,
people
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 would struggle
in growing
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to grow
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 their crops.
To conclude
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,
this
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 is my view that technology and development are vital factors for making
people
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 live in a decent way.

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planning
Plan your essay before writing. Write a clear view and stick to it.
structure
Give a simple, clear intro that states your view. Use one or two main ideas in the body and link them with easy links.
structure
Make topic sentences at the start of each paragraph. Each paragraph should have one main idea supported by a small example.
grammar
Check grammar and word choice. Use plain verbs and nouns. Fix common mistakes like wrong tense and missing articles.
vocabulary and examples
Choose examples that fit the point you make and explain how they show your idea. Do not drift to another topic.
conclusion
End with a short conclusion that restates your view and the reasons in one sentence.
content
The essay shows a clear view that life today is affected by tech and country growth.
structure
Simple idea flow with basic linking words is used.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Familiarity
  • Comfort
  • Social ties
  • Family ties
  • Belonging
  • Resources
  • Opportunities
  • Fear
  • Unknown
  • Financial constraints
  • Cultural attachment
  • Language barriers
  • Limited education
  • Skills
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