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In order to be successful at a sport, some think you must be physically strong while others believe mental strength is more important. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In
order
 to be successful
at
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in
 a sport, having a strong
physics
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physical
 and mental are important. Some view says that in
order
 to achieve
success
 in sport, physical
strength
 is more important than mental
strength
.
Other
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Another
 view says
otherwise
. The
first
 view says that having a strong
body
 can gain
success
 easily. When you have a strong muscle, high endurance, stable composure, you can become a good athlete. Cristiano Ronaldo,
for example
, is one of the strongest footballers in the world. He gained his
success
 on the football career because of his
body
. He could dribble easily and win on
body
-to-
body
 action because of his muscular
body
.
Also
, with his tall
body
, he could easily
score
 many goals by jumping on a shorter opponent and
score
 with his head. With his endurance level, he doesn’t get tired easily. He could sprint for 90 minutes total and make a great impact on his team. When he was facing Barcelona, he scored a quad-trick with his own head. With his tall
body
, he jumped as high as he can and beat other opponent’s physical
strength
.
On the other hand
, some people argue that mental
strength
 is more important. Sport is not just about practical
skill
, but it is
also
 about technical
skill
. By having a high mental
strength
, great tactics, steady mind, you could
also
 gain a win easily. Lionel Messi, the “Baloon D’ Or” (best player) winner, focuses more on technical
skill
 rather than practical
skill
. He does not have a strong muscle, tall
body
, and steady composure. With his mental
strength
Accept comma addition
strength, such
such
 as great tactics, high preparations, high mentality, he could
score
 many goals easily. One of his matches against Real Madrid, he scored 6 goals by using his tactics. He used a tactic called “Tiki Taka” (focus on pass rather than rush) and that mental
strength
 made an easy win
on
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for
 his team. When it comes to sports, I believe that mental
strength
 is more important than physical
strength
. When you have a strong
body
, of course you could beat your opponent easily. But it’s pointless to only focus on your
strength
. In
order
 to
score
 a goal in football, you ought to have a strong mental
strength
. It’s not about how hard you can
kick
 a
ball
, but it’s about the tactics on how you
kick
 it. When you
kick
 a
ball
, it’s important to look at the tactics
such
 as whether you
kick
 with your outside foot or knuckle, how you measure the wind in
order
 to get the right curve, and many more. As proven, Messi is better than Ronaldo because of his mental
strength
. Ronaldo tends to
kick
 a
ball
 as hard as he can and that could mislead the
ball
’s target.
On the other hand
, Messi tends to
kick
 a
ball
 with the best tactics he could think and that gave him the best player award. In conclusion, physical
strength
 and mental
strength
 are important in
order
 to gain
success
 at sports. Physical
strength
 gives you a better
body
 in
order
 to compete with others, while mental
strength
 gives you a better mindset and tactics.
However
, in sports, mental
strength
 is more important than physical
strength
. In
order
 to win
on
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in
 any competition, it is better to have a better preparation and the best tactics. 2 years ago, I attended a boxing match. One with big muscles while the other with small muscle but more prepared. With his preparation, he beat
the strong
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stronger
 opponent easily with his tactics. That kind of mental
strength
 led him to a win and a
success
 on boxing fight.

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