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Many people today use their phones to communicate by sending text messages than talking. What are the reasons for this? Does it have advantages and disadvantages

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These days many people use phones basically for the communication.I could say that the upbringing of mobile phones and
internet
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the internet
 has changed the idea of being in touch with
world
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the world
.All the information regarding anything is right
infront
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in front
 of the people on their mobile phones.I could say that they have made the life easier to live.
However thes
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However, this
However this
However the
genration
all the people living at the same time or of approximately the same age
generation
generations
 now a days are more concerned about their privacy and their personal space.They don't want to
distrub
move deeply
disturb
 anyone by talking
instaed
in place of, or as an alternative to
instead
 they thought texting could make work easier.They can even send
text
 messages
with out
in absence of
without
 fear.The
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 main reason to send
text message
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a text message
 is to save time as the youth
now a days
the period of time that is happening now; any continuous stretch of time including the moment of speech
nowadays
 are more concerned about their time as they value it more.Every invention has advantages and disadvantages as well. In
this
 case I could say that talking
make
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makes
 things clear to sort out.There can be
clear validation
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a clear validation
on
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of
any thing
an indefinite thing
anything
 in the talking.One may not understand what the other person is feeling or what they are trying to explain or deliver through
text
 messages but they can easily understand that by the talking.People can use the
text
messagesat
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messages at
 professional
life but
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life, but
 not yet personal life.They should spend some of their time by talking to their dear ones as that gives strength and confidence.

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