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With an increasing number of people eating fast food, which if eating too regularly can cause health issues, some people think that the only solution is to ban it completely. To what extent do you agree?

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Nowadays, there is an increased number of people consuming fast
food
 on a regular basis that make them at risk for several health diseases. I completely disagree with the proposal of some that the ultimate action to address
this
 problem is to ban fast
food
 chains completely as there are better solutions like health promotion and doing regular exercise.
Firstly
, eradication of fast
food
 does not guarantee a healthy population because there are a lot of factors in maintaining optimal health. Health promotion through mass media and print ads can educate the masses on what is the right amount and kind of
food
 to consume. In
this
 way, people will have enough knowledge about healthy foods and the appropriate amount to take.
In addition
, media advertisement about calorie counting will inform the crowd that occasional fast
food
 consumption can be done in accordance to the calorie needed by the body and the kind of nutrients it contain.
For instance
, some fast
food
 in Korea like McDonald’s is providing a detailed information regarding the calories each meal that their costumer can see before ordering.
Moreover
, regular physical activities are
also
 important in obtaining healthy body. Government may invest in creating free gym facilities that the people can access that are near their houses. Schools may
also
 promote regular exercise my incorporating it into their curriculum and encouraging their students to have regular physical activities.
In other words
, educational institutions may have an hour break from tedious classroom lecture and encourage them to do brisk walking in their school gyms or quadrangles. In conclusion, despite some people having an opinion that closure of fast
food
 is the only answer to growing population having heart issues, I completely disagree and believe that information dissemination through the media and regular exercise are still the best way to address
this
 concern.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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