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Doing an enjoyable activity with a child can develop better skills and imagination than reading. To what extent do you agree? Use reasons and specific examples to explain your answer.

#activity #child #skills #imagination
I strongly agree with the statement as In past, the parents encourage their children to read more
book
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books
. They were forced to read more books to get better knowledge and enhance their
understandings
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understanding
. But now, the parents participate in multiple activities which increase their children creativity and skills.
This
 essay will discuss the activities which build up particular skills
into
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in
 the children.
Firstly
, the physical activities into the children can give
excellent
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an excellent experience
experience
 from which they explore more than reading. The sports activities can develop the
special
pertaining to or involving or having the nature of space
spatial
 awareness in children. They learn and
experience
 more from the enjoyable activity
instead
 of reading. As they do not need to imagine the whole scenario in activity. It is already present in front of them and they can
experience
 and boost their skills and understandings.
Secondly
, the creative activity like painting
also enable
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also enables
 children to illustrate
what
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what's
 on their mind and give the picture to their imagination. They
are requires
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are requiring
require
 the creation and awareness of a visual
experience
. A survey found that the kids who were engaged in the painting activities in their childhood, they are becoming the professional painter.
This
demonstrate
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demonstrates
is demonstrated
 that the practice of art at an early age develops a creative adult. In Conclusion, there
are
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is
 a wide range of skills and activities that can be enhanced by the practice of a numerous childhood
activities
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activity
. While in
past
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the past
 the emphasize was on the reading and more
reading which
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reading, which
 is no longer exist
in
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at
 present. Now today, the more participation
into
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in
 the activities can
encourge
contribute to the progress or growth of
encourage
 more as it develops more awareness in children towards their imaginary thoughts.

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