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Space travel is fantastic these days, but there are many issues, such as environmental problems, that we should be focusing on. What are your views on the allocation of public funding?

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Technological advancement is perpetually changing world's living standards.
Space
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 exploration is highly regarded as a means to find new civilization to human kind to accommodate
burgeoning population
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the burgeoning population
 as well as
provides
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provided
providing
 future environmental phenomenon.
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, opponents say it will have detrimental effects on
atmosphere
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the atmosphere
 and contend that it is wise to allocate more revenue to basic contemporary issues.
This
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 essay will elaborate both the
view points
a mental position from which things are viewed
viewpoints
 and will state other needful allocation of public funding. There are myriad reasons to support
space
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 travel discoveries for
it can
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it, can
 bring more accurate forecasting to the earth dwellers
such
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 as drought, floods, volcano eruptions and many other climate disasters.
Space
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 satellites are powerful
space
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 equipments that rotate around the orbit of the earth and can be programed to do many things. It will help to explore other earth-like planets in the universe to find option for
future accommodation
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the future accommodation
 of humans.
For example
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,
recent Chandrayan-2 mission
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the recent Chandrayan-2 mission
 of ISRO of India was to explore far-end of the moon to examine particles and related discoveries that can help in future experiments. There are, though, several pitfalls about
it but
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it, but
 the most alarming one is rooted
to
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in
 the fact that due to a massive number of
space
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 travel by many countries, the debris and the
space
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 waste increase and float into infinite
space
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. According to
recent survey
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a recent survey
, most debris of satellites were from India, China and the US.
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,
instead
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 allocating vast amount of research and development funds to
space
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 programs, it is wise to manage recent issues
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 as global warming and depleting layers of natural resources. In conclusion,
Space
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 travel facilitates more to the human
kind but
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kind, but
 several contemporary issues need to be given priorities as well.
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