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Many people believe that social networking sites have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree?

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In recent years
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,
social networking sites
such
 as Facebook
,
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,
Twitter has created
detrimental effect
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a detrimental effect
 on most of the people in
entire world
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the entire world
.In my opinion
,
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,
I strongly agree that it makes person less social and isolated so they feel less confident and stressed.
Firstly
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,
one
 of the important demerit of social networking sites is that
,
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,
people
can not
can not
cannot
 take participation in social activity.Even they like to spend their time alone in their room.
Consequently
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,
they had fear
to
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of
 communication with their peer which makes them less confident and their overall development suffers which shows its impact in later years.
Secondly
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,
most of people like to make contact with the person whom they
never seen
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have never seen
are never seen
never saw
 and in future not possible for them to meet
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still they want to contact them and they never think of their friends and families.At
last
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they feel that no
one
 is
their
in or at that place
there
 to look after and feel isolated which is
one
 of the
reason
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reasons
 for their stress. Another important reason is that children are using these sites more and their psychological level has no idea that what
photoes
 they have to put on the internet because it stand for the years and
some
a human being
someone
one
 use it in
different way
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a different way
different ways
.
Likewise
,
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,
some
one
 has
create
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created
fack
fraudulent; having a misleading appearance
fake
 identity and take benefits of
some
a human being
someone
one
.These would affect the person emotionally and mentally. In conclusion
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,
however
,
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,
advancement in technology allows people to communicate with others at any corner of
world but
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the world, but
the world but
 it
affect
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affects
 social
activites
any specific behavior
activities
activists
 and individual mental and physical
abilites
the quality of being able to perform; a quality that permits or facilitates achievement or accomplishment
abilities
.
Goverment
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The government
Government
should has
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should have
 to start
awarness campaign
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an awareness campaign
awareness campaign
 for social
activites
any specific behavior
activities
activists
.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social isolation
  • virtual interactions
  • mental health
  • feelings of inadequacy
  • anxiety
  • depression
  • misinformation
  • destabilize
  • privacy concerns
  • data breaches
  • productivity
  • foster connections
  • educational content
  • social activism
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