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Only government action can solve housing shortages in big cities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is true that unavailability of living space in congested metropolitan can lead to unprecedented repercussions.
Therefore
, governments are burdened with the task to provide an effective and proper solution. I completely agree with the statement that its rule responsibility to mitigate these problems. Certainly, with the increase in population, people are forced to live in crowded areas subsidizing the standard of living.
In other words
, quality of life decrease substantially by
this
 phenomena.
In particular
, inhibitors face security issues as with clogged streets, the crime rate increases and it cannot be controlled by individuals or society so authorities have to take action,
such
 as enlarged in force units and installation of surveillance cameras, to overcome
this
 problem.
Additionally
, growth in garbage production rate and air pollution caused by traffic is seen in these places leading to deteriorating environmental condition.
Moreover
, to evade the situation, families prefer to live in the suburbs, away from the main cities. These not only deprives them of basic facilities
such
 as Hospital, which are mostly situated in the centre, but
also
 generate mobilization problems.
For instance
, it takes approximately one hour for commuters to reach the workplace from outskirts for jobs. Communities cannot provide
such
 facilities because of limited resources.
As a result
 the government has to indulge to construct amenities for families living on far side according to the requirements.
Furthermore
, efficient traffic system needs to be established to resolve travel issue.
For example
, London is expanding exponentially and government has provided underground railway called tube to facilitate citizens. In conclusion, even though societal problems, generate in populated cities, effective government policies and steps can help solve these problems for the betterment of society and the increase in life standard.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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