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Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievement and this sets a bad example to young people

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In the modern era famous people are known for their outer appearance and money they possess than their achievement.
This
 results in setting a harmful example to young messes.I agree
to
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with
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 statement and
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I
 will be discuss in the forthcoming paragraphs. To commence with, the famous people show the own power and the money
,
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,
but these are bad effect to young generation individual because these people
did not known
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didn't know
did not know
 what celebrate did so much struggle in our soul for that position and
they
of them or themselves
their
 younger individual only see the actual
life
 but, it is not seeing the behind verve.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
 these
reason
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reasons
 its harmful to
youngest
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young
younger
 people.
Such
 as people adapt new fashion for seeing a celebrities doing
this
 brand if they people was not afraid
this
company product
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company, product
 and other stuff
,
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,
then
 will be purchased because trend
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,
but people had not known its detrimental to youngest as long as, celebrities only promote that for give it
to
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for
 money. Unfortunately, these people are effective for the
luxury
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luxurious
life
,
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,
likes name and fame than had not known its to made his
life
 they did so much
hardwork
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hard work
 and so many
time
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times
 will
be spent to
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be spent this
this
life
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
 they achieved.
Otherwise
 young generation to not compare to yourself with celebrities. so far so,
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,
these effect to our individuals
life
For exam
ple,people
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celebrity's
celebrities'
celebrity
assuming a the
ir
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the young only effect
life
 with the not seeing real
life
 and not to looking o
ve
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of
r behind
life
that is
 the injuries to youngest people To conclude,people should be known about the behind
this
 celebrities
life
 because young only effect of actual but they read a backward
life
 to famous people how to do and what to do for their achievement

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