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Some people say that museum should be free where as others opine that some entry fee should be there. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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It is widely held believe that museum
entry
 fee should not be taken. But, there is a strong counter argument amongst a section of people that it should have some
entry
 fees,
however
, I am of opinion that
this
 is a matter that can be debated in light of several factors in reasonable conclusion can be drawn. The
first
 and foremost reason is to provide an opportunity for everyone to visit at these kind of places. To be more precise, people who belong to below poverty line are always denied to visit at the Museum due to lack of money. Eventually, it increases the level of dominating society by providing, free of cost,
then
 it makes it easier to reduce the determinants among these people. Another was mentioning reason is to get more chance of popularity worldwide. Because, it is free of cost,
then
 more and more people were visiting there and able to enhance their knowledge about a specific Nation in the whole world which acts as an advertisement in front of others.
For example
, a survey carried by famous scientist Mr. Robinson, at University, New Zealand revealed that the museum at Amritsar "Punjab history" is increasing 80% popularity in five years by providing free
entry
. On the other side, there is a certain group of people who vehemently that
entry
 fee should be there.
Firstly
,
this
 amount is helpful for the maintenance of museums. Because,
this
 building is costly to maintain properly. As well it can be demolished if it does not get more money.So, keeping
entry
 fees is helpful in maintenance.
Secondly
, it helps to increase the economy of the nation. Because, the collection of
this
 money helps to make an interactive structure of buildings, which definitely helpful to increase the tourism in the countries.
Thus
, tourism helps to boost economy directly. To conclude, after analysing both views I opine that museums should have some
entry
 fee because Money helps in various ways for these buildings as well Nations.

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