Some people believe that competitive sports, both team and individual, have no place in the school curriculum. How far do you agree or disagree?

Some claim that there is no room for any kind of sports events in the
school
calendar
.
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.
However
, I slightly disagree with them.
This
essay will discuss why every
school
should consider
makeing
the act that results in something coming to be
making
time for sports competition
.
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.
Most schools often consider that sports events are
waste
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a waste
of time. They think that
Instead
of conducting these events, it is way better to invest that time in finishing their course
syallabus
an integrated course of academic studies
syllabus
so that students can focus much more on
revison
editing that involves writing something again
revising
for their exams. Another major factor is schools are quite worried that these
sort
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sorts
of competitions might cause physical injuries to children.
Although
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Despite
all the precautions might be taken, there is always a chance for accidents.
Furthermore
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Furthermore, school
school
management is supposed to answer to the
victim
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victim's
parents, which is their biggest fear.
For
example in
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example, in
USA two students eventually died in the game of
kabbadi
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Kabbadi
cabbage
and their parents took legal action against the
school
.
On the other hand
, sports competitions have a lot of productive advantages, which are really necessary for a student to learn,
such
as Teamwork.
Furthermore
, it helps the children to learn how to work as a group and balance the team for achieving success Whereas, it
also
motivates the loser to work harder, which is a crucial aspect to learn for
future
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the future
.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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