Some people believe that technology has made man more social. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Experts throughout both the developing and developed world have debated whether the advent of sophisticated modern

technology

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as mobile phones and laptops have helped to enhance and improve people’s social lives or whether the opposite has become the case. Personally, I strongly advocate the former view.

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essay will discuss both sides using examples from the UK government and Oxford University to demonstrate points and prove arguments. On the one

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is ample, powerful, almost daily evidence that

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technology

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can be

detrimental especially

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detrimental, especially

to the younger generation who are more easily affected by its addictive nature and which can result in people feeling more isolated from the society.

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, the invention of online social media sites and apps,

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as Twitter and Facebook have reduced crucial face-to-face interactions dramatically. Through use of these appealing and attractive mediums, people feel in touch and connected yet lack key social skills and the ability to communicate.

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, dependence on

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devices is built up frighteningly easily which may have a damaging effect on mental health and encourage a sedentary lifestyle.

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, recent scientific research by the UK government demonstrated that 90% of people in their 30s spend over 20 hours per week on Messenger and similar applications to chat with their friends

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of meeting up and spending quality time together.

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, it is conclusively clear that these

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technology

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technological

advancements have decreased and diminished our real-life interactions.

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there are significant downsides to technological developments, its’ multifold advantages cannot be denied.

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is largely because the popularity of

technology

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cellphones

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cell phones

allows people to connect freely and easily with no geographical barriers. People are able to share any type of news, information, photos and opinions with their loved ones whenever and wherever

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they want, therefore

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keeping a feeling of proximity and closeness.

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, an extensive study by Oxford University illustrated that people who work, or study abroad and use applications like Facetime and WhatsApp to chat with their families, are less likely to experience loneliness and feel out of the loop than those who do not.

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, businessmen are

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undoubtedly able to benefit from these advances by holding virtual real-time meetings using

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may increase the chance of closing business deals without the need to fly. From the arguments and examples given I firmly believe that overall communication and mans’ sociability has advanced enormously due to the huge technological progress of the past twenty years.

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, it is predicted that its popularity will continue to flourish in the future.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

431 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

social interaction
connect
communicate
video conferencing
stay in touch
online communities
forums
like-minded individuals
global communication
collaboration
access to information
knowledge
bridge the gap
social isolation
detachment
face-to-face communication
genuine human connection
maintain
real-life interactions
balance

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