Some people believe that many of the problems in today's world are caused by a lack of cultural understanding. What can be done to help people understand cultures which are different from their own?

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In my personal opinion, I agree that many of the problems in today’s world are caused by a lack of cultural understanding. At the moment, there are many cultures and religions very different: they are complicated to understand and

this

cause cultural “fight” that finish, in the worst case, in racism episodes. Probably, in a big

city

this

not happen but

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doesn't happen, but

doesn't happen but

in a small

city

, as Bisceglie, it can happen. In fact, in a small

city

, there are not a lot of foreign people, but there are many traditional things related to the

city

’s story. For a person that wasn’t born in

this

city

this

part of country, is impossible to learn

uses

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the uses

and traditions.

This

is caused by two reasons: one of them, is that there are a lot of years of traditional history and it is

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huge amount of information for a foreigner. The other reason is the limited mind of people born in

this

small

city

: they disagree to integrate foreign people in their culture. They block

this

integration because they think it was dangerous and they want to protect their own.

This

is totally

uncorrect

not correct; not in conformity with fact or truth

incorrect

: culture sharing is the only way to preserve it. I don’t mean to mix up different cultures, but just share it: in

this

mode, we can transfer it to the future people and we

do not lost

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do not lose

it. Another way to make easier cultural understanding, is increasing the

student’s

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students’

sharing or student exchange: in

this

mode, we can learn to young people to have an open mind that makes the difference in the future of cultural integration and understanding.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

1 paragraphs

270 words

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