Some people decide to start their own business instead of working for a company or organization. Do the advantages for people working for their own business outweigh the disadvantages? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In recent years
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some people
believes
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believe
that they should start their own
business
instead
of working for a
company
.In my opinion
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,
people
likes
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like
to
work
in the
environment
which provides more freedom and give ability to develop
decisive factor
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a decisive factor
of a
person while,
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person, while
working as an employee in
company
work
under pressure and obey the rules of the
company
.
Firstly
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,
one of the most important advantages is that to start your own
business
provides opportunities to
work
in
environment
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an environment
environments
the environment
which has more freedom.
This
will create
stress free
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a stress free environment
environment
which improves productivity of
person
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a person
people
.
For example
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,
research
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direct the course of; manage or control
conducted
contacted
by USA shows that
person
who starts own
business
get
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gets
benefit by applying their
stretegy
an elaborate and systematic plan of action
strategies
increase their confidence and working capability.
On the other hand
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,
if
person
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a person
the person
people
is working in
company
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a company
that is
owned by other so they have to obey the rules of that
person
.Even sometimes it may be possible they are given more
work
and they fill more
streessed
suffering severe physical strain or distress
stressed
and pressurized.
For example
,
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,
if
person
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a person
the person
is suffering from health issue still have to think about
work
responsibilities
thus
leads to
more stressful
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the more stressful environment
a more stressful environment
environment
.At
last
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,
person
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a person
the person
is free from taking decision about
company
to handle critical situations. In conclusion,
although
working in
company
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a company
the company
gives
lesser decision responsibility but
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the lesser decision responsibility, but
the lesser decision responsibility but
gives more stress while if
person
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the person
a person
running its own
business
than have more freedom and improve
person's working ability
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person's working abilities
the person's working ability
.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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