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The bar chart shows the scores of teams A, B and C over four different seasons. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the scores of teams A, B and C over four different seasons. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart compares and contrasts data on the changes in how many
points
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that
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 three teams gained in four consecutive seasons, starting
at
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 2002. A closer look at the diagram highlights the fact that
team
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 B was always the leading
team
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 with the highest number of
points
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 obtained annually. Meanwhile, there were huge gaps between it and those two teams, with the notable exception of
team
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 A in 2004. More specifically, despite starting at
highest
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 figure of 82
points
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,
team
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 B experienced a dramatic fall of nearly 40
points
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 after three consecutive years.
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, it still remained
its
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in its
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 top position with 55
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 compared to only 8
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 and 5
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 for
team
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 A and
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C
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 in the final researched season respectively. The opposite trend was witnessed by
team
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 A and
team
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C
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 with the effort to gain more
points
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 as possible. In spite of sitting at the bottom out of the three teams,
team
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 A showed a great effort to gain the
second
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 highest
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 with 35
points
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 which
was
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 threefold larger than that of
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C
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 in 2004.
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,
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 the number of
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 obtained by
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C
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 reached its peak at 15
points
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 in 2003, but it gradually decreased and finished
at
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third
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 place with only 5
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 which
less
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is less
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 than 3
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 compared to that of
team
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 A in 2005.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words points, team, c with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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