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Human activity has had a negative effect on plants and animals all over the world. Some people think that it is too late to do something about it. Others think that there is still time to take effective action. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

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In my opinion the human activity had a great impact on the nature which,
interm
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in term
 impacts the survival of the plants and the animals.As per the recent
studies they
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studies, they
 have revealed 60 percent of
wild
all living things (except people) that are undomesticated
wildlife
life
 had got damaged due to deforestation. If we consider the truth on earth humans are destroying the forests and the agricultural lands for their survival.Unfortunately, we haven't noticed the impact of it on our
life
 and our existence. Consider the fact that the growth rate of human
are increasing
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is increasing
 in number. At the same time the land dedicated for animal
life
 getting decreased. We have almost lost the control over the balanced
life
. Nowadays, the usage of the electronic and the automobiles are very high. The greatest consumption of carbon and
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 sub products are increasing the global warming which, is challenging the growth of plants.
However
, we can't stop the natural calamities
.
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.
Since we had the above mentioned problems and it will take decades to change the current situation. I strongly agree there is a lot negative impact on the trees and the living creatures due to human activities.Even though chances are very less to change the
curreny
a flow of electricity through a conductor
current
 situation right back to normal. We can make a trail to save the environment.
This
 should start as a
movement
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movement, then
then
 only we can provide
better
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a better life
life
to
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for
 our future generation. The Balance in nature and human
life
 is
must
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a must
.
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